The workshop was deserted. Dusty and cobweb-covered, there was no sign of what had happened here. Marie stepped over the nails and boards left hastily on the floor. She looked for a sign… anything that could jar her memory, help her remember that moment. She had only been sixteen. Now she was thirty; she would be more careful. With her index finger she carefully wrote his initials in the sawdust. She imagined hearing the scream of the saw blade cutting through the board. It stopped, he stepped forward, and kissed her firmly on the lips. Together they ran toward the setting sun.
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Made me swoon 🙂
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Happy story and I like it! Thanks, Nan
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Dear Ruth,
Who can resist a happy, romantic ending? Made me smile.
shalom,
Rochelle
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I was relieved also that it was a happy ending, and the sawblade made me wonder for a short time. But the “more careful” part leaves a question in the reader’s mind about what happened and a good lead-in for a backstory.
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Good choice of title and I enjoyed the detail about writing his initials in the dust.
janet
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I’m pleased it was a happy, happy story. I got the shivers when you mentioned the saw blade.
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Great! That was my intention! Thanks for the comment.
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Brilliant idea~ write a story of 100 words! I must try to do “zoom in;” perhaps I could join the Friday Fictioneers? I imagine “he” broke her heart, thus the need to be more careful.
Reflecting! “Love” this short, short story!
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Yes, anyone can join. This is only my second week but I love the “shortness” of it and reading everyone’s take on the photo…. so many different ideas!
(Yes… he broke her heart) 🙂
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I like a happy ending! Nice use of the prompt.
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i’m thinking maybe what started out as a good thing now isn’t so and why she wants to be more careful…your words describe this scene nicely, Ruth. i like it!
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It’s always great when someone understands what you wrote! Thanks!
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