DP Challenge: The Devil is in the Details

This week’s DP Challenge is using details in your writing. If you want to participate in the challenge follow this link

http://dailypost.wordpress.com/2013/01/21/writing-challenge-details/

1. A woman walks into a restaurant. Imagine this scene and capture every detail you can in a few paragraphs. Describe the woman: is she old, young, or in-between? What type of restaurant is it: fancy, casual, or a diner? What is she doing? Pack as much detail as you can into a few paragraphs that will help us imagine this woman clearly.

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She pushed open the finger-printed glass door with her shoulder, clumsily clutching her cane and shabby leather purse, one in each hand.  A frigid gust of wind followed her into the small bar & grill and a musty scent of unwashed clothing surrounded her and her well-worn winter coat.   One large wobbly black button still gave the once-dressy long coat closure.  She stood unsteadily squinting her eyes through lopsided glasses that seemed shiny and new in contrast to her wrinkled face.

“HIya Hon. Just one?” shouted the brassy blond waitress who was polishing glasses behind the old wooden bar.  The bar was lined with round metal stools, recently upholstered with a neon green vinyl which seemed out-of-place in the otherwise shabby surroundings.   The woman nodded.  “You want a booth or sit at the bar?” the waitress said over her shoulder as she continued polishing and stacking the beer glasses.

“Booth,” whispered the old woman.  She seemed almost unable to utter a sound.  Her shoulders sagged and she shuffled her feet across the stained, wooden floor.  The waitress seated the old woman at the back of the restaurant, oblivious to the fact that it was hard for the old lady to walk very far.  She collapsed into the booth, dropping her shiny metal cane with a clatter, startling the people in the next booth. Carefully, she placed her purse next to her keeping the strap around her arm.

“You know you just can’t be too careful, ” she thought to herself.

 

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Welcome to Life in the 50's and 60's and beyond .... where I write about my childhood memories, music of the 60's and about life in the country. I am a mother, grandmother, farmer's wife, business owner, and retired teacher.
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10 Responses to DP Challenge: The Devil is in the Details

  1. yes, please continue…I’ve already got thoughts running through my mind about her…

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  2. Pingback: DP Writing Challenge The Devil Is in the Details. Part 2 | retiredruth Life in the 50's and beyond

  3. marymtf says:

    Goodness me, Ruth, have we met?

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  4. Caddo Veil says:

    You did an excellent job, Ruth–I was right there, seeing the scene easily!

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  5. Nice response to the challenge, Ruth. I could see everything. So glad you gave that woman a cane! And yes, please write more so you can tell us her story. 🙂

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  6. lucewriter says:

    This might just be a passage of description, but . . . well, it’s not. It made me so sad for the woman. I’ve imagined all kinds of sad situations for her already. Are you going to continue with her story in your next post :)?

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