“Andy!”
“Andy! Game over…. come out. It’s going to be dark soon. We need to head back to the car.”
Impatience, irritation, and a bit of alarm filled my mind and my voice.
“Andy, please. This is not fun anymore.”
A rustling sound. Andy? The breeze? Shadows could not hide my growing uneasiness.
“That’s it! I am waiting no longer. I will meet you back at the car.”
Flashing lights in the vicinity of the car. I began to run.
“You have the right to remain silent …”
Why are they reading Andy his rights?
Why don’t they see me?
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a thrilling ending, Ruth! i fear trouble ahead…
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Great twist!
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Great build-up of tension to a perfectly chilling end!
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Awesome! Absolutely awesome! A ghostly tale if there ever was one…
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WHAT?! Great intrigue! Totally got me with the end. Never saw it comin’. Nice job.
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Wow! Didn’t see the end coming…
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Enigmatic, to say the least. What is the untold story? It’s good.
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Good story with a deadly twist at the end. Well done.
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Dear Ruth,
Killer twist at the end. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I really liked this Ruth and am intrigued by what was implied yet left unsaid. Well done
Dee
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Great story, Ruth. I’m guess the person calling for Andy was a female. And her name was Miranda, right? Ha!
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lol… had to think about that for a minute! Clever.
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Brilliantly filled with wonder and suspense. A great example of setting a scene and telling a story with so few words.
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Simply wow! amazing story telling too !
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WOW! Perfect story and well told! Just terrific and scary! Thanks! Nan 🙂
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Creepy and wonderful! I wonder how long it will take her to realize she is dead and he pushed her? Good writing! Well done! Nan 🙂
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I love this for all the story you don’t say but is implied. A nice, creepy story.
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Good bit of suspense for your Friday Fictioneers story this week, Ruth. I enjoyed the read.
Cheers!
Marie Gail
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I was so happy that the meaning was immediately clear to me, poor girl..and kudos to your alliteration 🙂 enjoyed that bit.
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Oooo. This gripped me right from the beginning! The narrator’s terror is so palpable, and I love how you gave just enough description to paint the scene but left certain details open to interpretation! I’ve found these short stories tend to draw out my darker side as well. Though, you have the admit, those trees in the picture are pretty darn creepy. Great work!
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And I thought she was being unreasonable to Andy. Very well-done story!
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Actually so did I until I got to the end…. sometimes my fingers on the keyboard have a mind of their own!
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Wow, that was very cool.
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Definitely not a good outing!
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Ah.. sooner or later she’ll realize what he has done.. let’s hope she has poltergeist powers.
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you are quite alliterative! Thanks….
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Great!
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Thank you!
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Just my type of story.. 😉
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Glad you liked it. Hope you are feeling better!
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Thanks and yes much better.
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OOOOOOO!! Sooo good!
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Deadly good story. 🙂
janet
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What a story! In so few words, you pull us all in!
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Thanks for your comments!
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Excellent! Just my kind of story.
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A lovely twist; most unexpected..! 😉
Well done… It was a good read.
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Oh, dear. I fear she won’t be seeing Andy anytime soon…at least not in this world.
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This story steers me down two outcome paths; one is scary, dark, fatal. Shivers!
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I am not sure why these short stories pull me into the scary mode. That is not usually my style! Thankis for all of your comments… always 🙂
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